求 关于 将来时的 两篇英语作文 急急急急急急急急急...........................

If i have enough money
If I have enough money, I will travel for seven days. The fitst day, I will go to beijing, because beijing is the capital city of china. First, I will go to tian'anmen square. And then, I will go to the palace museum. Then,i will go to my grandparents'house. I miss them very much. From the third day to the sixth day, I will go to qingdao with my friends. I will go to swim in qingdao. At the last day, I will go on a trip to my city. I want to know my city carefully,
I think i will have fun.

my dream school
we all have to go to school everyday, but schools are all designed quite the same. if i can make a school of my favour. i'd like it to be like this.
first, we will have a classroom fully equiped and better for us to communicate. to begin with, we will not sit in regular rows, instead, we will sit in a circle, so we can discuss together more easily. and we will have computers in every table in order to learn more effectively. also we will not use chalk or ink pen anymore, because the chemical and ash is bad for our health.
and our lessons should not be taught for the exams. we can choose the lessons that we are interested in by ourselves, such as dancing ,drawing, history,etc. and we will also discuss more. other students' nice thoughts can be our treasures,too.
but as we become stronger in mental, we must be stronger in phsyical too. so the playground for our physical exercise is important. i d like it to be bigger and swimming pool is my long cherished place.
that is my dream school.

这2个可以吗？

If i have enough money
If I have enough money, I will travel for seven days. The fitst day, I will go to beijing, because beijing is the capital city of china. First, I will go to tian'anmen square. And then, I will go to the palace museum. Then,i will go to my grandparents'house. I miss them very much. From the third day to the sixth day, I will go to qingdao with my friends. I will go to swim in qingdao. At the last day, I will go on a trip to my city. I want to know my city carefully,
I think i will have fun.

my dream school
we all have to go to school everyday, but schools are all designed quite the same. if i can make a school of my favour. i'd like it to be like this.
first, we will have a classroom fully equiped and better for us to communicate. to begin with, we will not sit in regular rows, instead, we will sit in a circle, so we can discuss together more easily. and we will have computers in every table in order to learn more effectively. also we will not use chalk or ink pen anymore, because the chemical and ash is bad for our health.
and our lessons should not be taught for the exams. we can choose the lessons that we are interested in by ourselves, such as dancing ,drawing, history,etc. and we will also discuss more. other students' nice thoughts can be our treasures,too.
but as we become stronger in mental, we must be stronger in phsyical too. so the playground for our physical exercise is important. i d like it to be bigger and swimming pool is my long cherished place.
that is my dream school.